A new divide I created within, to make sense of the infinite futility that lies inside…

Ashes Of My Fears

Reality can’t see
What fantasy hides
I get lost in the truth
Find myself in a lie
You were but a dream
Now I’m not so sure
I used to be innocent
I’ve forgotten what’s pure
You were an illusion
A dream I dared to dream
Fading in to darkness
In the shadows of my whims
Until all that remained was
The ghost of a flickering flame
Fighting a losing battle
Against the winds of change


22 responses

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  2. every line is well plotted,
    every word counts here.

    ashes of fears, a sad but reflective truth at some degree…

    perfectly done!

    September 10, 2010 at 6:10 am

  3. I am well,
    I appreciate your contribution.
    Happy Thursday,
    Happy Friday!
    Enjoy reading others.

    September 10, 2010 at 6:11 am

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  5. those last three lines.. man, I could feel this poem so well.. lovely verse!

    mine for the rally is

    September 10, 2010 at 7:12 am

  6. That’ my kind of poem! I love the sense of loss you have expressed. beautifully written.

    September 10, 2010 at 7:37 am

  7. so sad but lovely !!!!

    September 10, 2010 at 8:10 am

  8. Beautifully written: I love the skill with which you have placed rhymes, half rhymes and assonance.

    September 10, 2010 at 8:32 am

  9. Rhythm and rhyme perfectly blended
    A dream I dared to dream….. stole it away… Bravo!!
    for the rally

    September 10, 2010 at 10:38 am

  10. This is a superb write. Really well crafted. Bisous, Love and Light, Sender

    September 10, 2010 at 1:49 pm

  11. Perfectly crafted which reflects a true artist. I am inspired!

    September 10, 2010 at 2:34 pm

  12. Very nice piece!! Really portrays a sense of loss and confusion. I liked the emotion given by it.

    September 10, 2010 at 3:12 pm

  13. Well written. It flows nicely.

    September 10, 2010 at 9:58 pm

  14. Haunting & heartbreaking.. good job in choice of words…
    Happy Rally 🙂

    September 11, 2010 at 3:38 am

  15. Dakshima

    It is sad..yes…but i simply loved it.
    see me on http://loveamongotherthings.wordpress.com/

    September 11, 2010 at 2:13 pm

  16. This poem is amazing. I love it, it’s got to be one of my favorite poems now.

    My Poets Rally Poem: http://robinelizabeth58.wordpress.com/2010/08/05/falling-august-5-2010/

    September 12, 2010 at 9:28 pm

  17. C.

    Thank you! 🙂

    September 13, 2010 at 5:16 am

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  19. So much explained, in so few words, loved the contrast of this poem, xk

    September 18, 2010 at 1:45 pm

  20. http://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/2010/09/monday-poetry-potluck-kings-queens-and.html

    Hello, friend:

    Monday Poetry Potluck Is NOW open, linking is open from Sunday 8pm to Tuesday, 8pm, welcome join us by linking in 1 to 3 poems, you could use an old poem, the more you share, the happier we are…hurry up!
    Thanks in advance.
    Hope to see you in our lovely potluck…

    September 27, 2010 at 7:38 am

  21. I like how you dont rhyme but the lines retain a sort of relevance to each other when you analyze the syllabic aspect of the poem

    October 1, 2010 at 7:41 am

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