A new divide I created within, to make sense of the infinite futility that lies inside…

The Battle

Weakness of the heart
Eclipsed by the strength of the mind
My mind which shuts the door
On all the words
My heart wants to say to you
And as this cacophony of silence
resonates within
I live a lie
As you live blind

My mind won the battle
I lost the war


8 responses

  1. u win a new war,
    this poem is what everyone will adore…

    thanks for sharing!

    September 24, 2010 at 7:10 pm

    • C.

      Thank you 🙂

      September 30, 2010 at 6:41 pm

  2. You touched on a lot of themes I consider important both poetically and philosophically. The title caught my eye almost immediately, and reading through the poem several times, I was struck by how your word choice reflected back on the ideas you were presenting. Quite enjoyable, though I think you could drop the last couplet and maintain the emotional power of the poem.

    I am gonna enjoy reading through your archives. Thanks for posting such a great poem.


    September 30, 2010 at 7:56 am

  3. I think this is pretty strong work. I agree with Caribbean Fool above on the couplet though. ‘Cacophony of silence’ is an evocative phrase.

    Luke @ WordSalad

    October 5, 2010 at 7:39 pm

  4. C.

    Thank you very much for the comments and visiting!

    October 20, 2010 at 3:06 am

  5. cacophony of silence..?
    Very well done My Dear!! Powerful piece of work.. 🙂 xoxox

    November 7, 2010 at 10:00 am

    • C.

      Thank you so much! 🙂

      November 7, 2010 at 5:21 pm

  6. I wanted to say, thank you so very much for your previous participation at Jingle Poetry potluck.
    Your entry adds light and love to our community; we would love to have you this coming Monday,
    Any poem is welcome.
    Keep shining,
    You Are The Best!

    November 7, 2010 at 10:00 am

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